 Essay correction for Pre-1 Grade (3) (No.2031 への返信) - Takeshi  |
TOPIC: Pre-1 Grade (2021-1)
Agree or disagree: Big companies have a positive effect on society
PONTS
Products
The economy
The environment
Work-life balance
[ Two points / 120-150 words ]
I think that big companies have a positive effect on society.
First, in big companies they make a lot of products by once so it’s will be cheap. When it is cheap, many people will buy it and people can make much more better product from that money. Also, big company can make a good product so they can make our life more convenient.
Second, working at big company can make work-life balance good. At small company there are less worker so people have to work more than big company and their life balance will be bad. For example, if you compare Google and a small company most people thinks Google workers work-life balance are better than it.
From these reasons, I think that big company have a positive effect on society.
[添削例]
I think it is true that big companies have some positive effects on society.
First, big companies can create high-quality products that make our lives more convenient. Since they have enough funds and human resources to invest in the latest technology, they are more likely to develop products that improve the quality of our lives. Moreover, many people are attracted to buy such products, which helps improve the economy.
Second, big companies can play an important role in improving work-life balance in society. Most employees working for large companies, for example, are allowed to take two days off a week and discouraged from working overtime, so they can have enough time to spend with their family or friends. As a result, smaller companies are also influenced by them and encouraged to do the same thing, making the working conditions better for their employees as well.
For these reasons above, I agree that big companies have positive effects on society.
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